Escape - 2

This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 10; the tenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.




Sometimes in the duel of love, Heart gets overwhelmed by the Brain
It’s high time, it says, to move on; than wasting your time in vain
Better things are there in future; just don’t keep spoiling your chances
To keep intact a rotten tree; which has even shed its branches
Forget those smiles and the meanings, you used to make out of them
Someone never cared enough, you were alone steering that helm
Than sitting here and expecting that one last miracle will take place
To a new life, to a new dawn, you must get up and set your pace
Miss this one chance and you’ll end up sulking, over and over again
That gift of life that you possess, in this sorrow will just drain
Person to person it depends, how they get over this emotional fight
All one needs to do is, forget the past and set priorities right
The time has finally come to put to an end this Heart and Brain's strife
Time to ESCAPE from vortex of emotions to a new blissful life


As I escaped from becoming a Fool last time, I decided to compensate for it by Escaping twice this time. So here is my second entry for Blog-a-Ton 10. This is another ACROSTIC from my stable after my recent attempt, Religion. Though, this poem is pretty amateurish but was pretty difficult to write as here, rather than the first letter, the first words of each line form a message. So do not miss the message in red which is how I define Escape in this post. To know more about Acrostic and read my previous attempt, click here.
And yeah, if you haven't read my first entry for Blog-a-Ton 10 as yet, just click here. That's the real thing :)


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http://www.flickr.com/photos/27635621@N06/ by Collegium Kelowna (edited)


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40 doses of compassionate comments received.:

Nethra said...

That was thought provoking. :)

Mr. Pramathesh™ Borkotoky said...

It does not qualify for Blog-a-ton. The title is not Escape. :P

Marshall hoke bhi itna nahi jaante?

Dhiman said...

Buy 1 get 1 free :) .... I am poetry challenged but agree this was really difficult to pull off ....

Rachana Shakyawar said...

@ Vipul

What a beautiful way to present the thoughts!
Simply loved it...moreover the post is enchanting!


~Keep the Sprak ALive..

Simplicity of Life!!!!!! said...

Well Written!!!!!!!!!

Vipul Grover said...

@Nethra.. ur profile pic gels so well with ur comment :p
thnx :)

@Pramathesh.. Marshal hun isliye kuchh bhi kar sakta hu :p

@Dhiman.. haha.. try try dhiman.. lets c ur anothr attempt at poetry :p

@Rachana.. thnx buddy.. alwez gr8 2 c ur comment :)

@Simplicity of Life.. thnx. keep visiting :)

Anu said...
This comment has been removed by the author.
Vipul Grover said...

Haha, Anu.. yeah its a poem.. atleast tht one thing i alwez ensure with a simple a-a-b-b rhyming scheme :p
I was actually scratching my head as 2 which part u r talking about.. thn thought mayb u were reading couple of posts nd posted a comment meant for sum1 else in my blog.. thn rmmbrd its my comment form :p

Anu said...

oops! sorry :(

deleted the comment thinking it was in bad taste... thanks for responding though :)

blog-a-ton is a great initiative :)

Geeta said...

You presented your thoughts beautifully...


liked it

Jayanta Deka said...

Let me think now and not escape that...
Quite thought provoking... Nice post...
Cheers LIFE
JD

Vipul Grover said...

@Anu.. as long as its within the societal parameters of decency, any criticism is welcome :p
u missd the lines u liked :p
thnx for appreciating my effort.. keep reflecting :P

@Geeta.. thnx so mch for ur kind wrds.. um happy u liked it :)

@JD.. haha.. gud u though this time :p
thnx for appreciating..

Mahesh Kalaal said...

hey vipul...
the comment made by copernicus is mine....session issue....
delete it
......
....
..

Blame it on my poor comprehending skills , i could nt get completely the summary of the post.....may be i didnt read it the way it has to be......
But yes,
your last line made all the difference and the impact....also, the line made from the words in red...

For me, it is a new type of presentation.....lemmi take the que from yoo

Vipul Grover said...

Well Mahesh, it simply talks about failed love and how the brain is now telling him/her to let go!!

Do try it out nd leave a link for me to read once u do :)

Leo said...

yes..very thought provoking post! :) well done Marshal! :)

Amity said...

So this is what you're telling me as in answer to my escape poem?

Very nice poetry...I was even thinking it is more of a sonnet than an acrostic! Because of the rhyme scheme,, aabbcc, etc...:)

"Sometimes it's better to forget someone than to miss that person all the time"...quite painful eh....:)

Yes, forget the past, set priorities right, and I agree with you!

Vipul Grover said...

@Leo.. thnx Leo, i js intndd it 2 b an entry for the sake of numbers; gud to hear tht its actually thought provoking :p

@Amity.. yeah, i jus love rhyming.. most of thm go aabb or abab :)
yeah, this emotional strife cn b pretty painful.. have been thr, have seen it :p

Sureindran said...

Just as good as your first one. Infact, I like this a little better!

Sureindran R. - Escape

Vipul Grover said...

Thnx Sureindran.. Keep reflecting :)

Chanz said...

I actually liked the concept... It was a nice way of explaining the concept..but frankly, I couldnt really understand... Maybe because I am not too good with poetry... maybe i'll read it again...

But I will surely research about Acrostic.. :)

tikulicious said...

This was worth reading. Simply food for thought. loved it. Glad I decided to participate .. learning and enjoying every bite ..delicious

Chatterbox said...

Very nice Vipul :)

Something different put in words in a very different from conventional poetry or acrostic in itself :)

Keep up the good work :D :D

Nachiketa said...

thanks for dropping by....
nice thoughts... but tell me... is there a "how to forget" for dummies :)

a lot of people i know need it ;)

cheers,
The Variable, Crazy Over Desserts - Nachiketa
Catch me on facebook @ Crazy Over Desserts

Lucy Fur said...

Hi Vipul, I have been reading your work for quite sometime now. Could I tempt you into considering a submission for a baby e-magazine called the survivor chronicles?The details can be found here.

http://feministjungle.blogspot.com/2010/05/call-for-submissions.html

The magazine is a celebration of art as a healing power. It dedicated to all those who have survived trauma of some kind.We would love to have a submission from you for our very first edition!If its not too much to ask, I was wondering if something could be run about it on blog a tonic.If this venture is successful it can actually touch lives!thank you!:)

The Fool said...

Nice poem. You managed the rhyme and ACROSTIC well without seeming deliberate and loosing track of meaning.

Vipul Grover said...

@Chanz.. I hope u got it in ur second read, othrwise js refer to my xplanation to Mahesh :)
Thnx for appreciating this form of poetry!

@Tikuli.. thnx thr.. gud tht u decidd to participate.. we touched 60 mark thnx 2 it :)

@Chatterbox.. Hey thnx a lot.. i like being differnet and being liked for it :)

Vipul Grover said...

@Nachiketa.. haha.. tht was a gud one.. fact remains watevr u do, this emotional atyachaar continues :p

@Lucy Fur aka Shreya.. I'll get back to u 2 know more details :)

@The Fool.. Hey, tht was a vry cool review.. I was actually fearing tht it might sound deliberate.. bt u'v wiped tht speck of doubt :)

BK Chowla, said...

Very nice.Somehow I never became a part of this.

Karan Shah said...

very right you got to move on in life...come what may

Vipul Grover said...

@Chowlaji.. Well, yeah i hop u join in nxt time.. Thnx 4 appreciating :)

@Karan.. welcome to the blog.. keep reflecting :)

sushobhan roy said...

Some soul-searching post.. Ya sometimes it's better to let bygones be bygones.. :)
Wonderful write up.. :)

About Vyo's World said...

Superb way of expression!! Loved the post!!

Shilpa Garg said...

That's a nice expression. Liked the vertical and horizontal expression through words!!
All the best for BAT-10!
Cheers :)

Mehak said...

this is great! and i totally agree with the message spelt out in red. and i didn't find it amateurish as such..
all the best! :)

Vipul Grover said...

@Sushobhan.. hi, welcum 2 this blog :)
thnx 4 sharing ur views and um happy u liked it.. keep reflecting!

@Vyo.. hey welcome back.. thnx 4 appreciating :)

@Shilpa.. Hey di.. thnx a lot.. Cheers :)

@Mehak.. Oh thnq so mch.. thn u mst read my othr poems too :)

Vibushan L Narayan said...

Beautiful. Just beautiful!

Yemiledu said...

Hey that was a very nice successful attempt. Liked the meaning and thoughts in each line.
A escape that everyone need at some or the other point of time in their lives.

Good work.
And hey you suffer from ACDS?
SOrry to hear that. ;~)
Will be visiting you again..

Vipul Grover said...

@Vibushan.. thnx a lot and welcum 2 this blog:)

@Yemiledu.. thnx thr 4 d sweet wrds.. well about ACDS, yeah, its pretty critical.. keep visiting and commenting :p

Nithin R S said...

Nice poetry. Yeah the message is pretty clear. Acrostic poems are quite interesting.

Vipul Grover said...

Hi Nithin.. Thnx fr dropping by and appreciating and empathizing withthis piece of poetry.. Keep reflecting :)

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